五个动漫女孩小游戏:帮我看一下我论文的论点,谢谢

我原来是这样写的:
Internet is a two-edged sword, the influences are twofold, and during the learning process, it is inevitably to encounter some negative impacts and issues. we should be rational while using Internet resources, eliminating the dross, selecting the essential, making full use of the advantages of Internet to learn English, overcoming its shortcomings, getting twice the result with half the effort and then your English will developing with each passing day!
我请了一个朋友帮我看看,他帮我修改成:
Internet is a two-edged sword, the influences are twofold, and during the learning process it is inevitable to encounter some negative impacts and issues. We should be rational while using Internet resources, eliminating the dross and selecting the essential. Making full use of the advantages of Internet to learn English while overcoming its shortcomings this will result in getting twice the result with half the effort. Helping you to open the door for your English to developing with each passing day!
现在很困惑~~~请高人指点
我请的是外国朋友帮我看的，他说他从来没有见过dross这个词，但是取其精华，去其糟粕是标准说法