长沙幼儿园最便宜学费:语法好者进

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我是一名英语初学者,在暑假写了几篇短文,请英语好的朋友帮忙看一下,是否有错误,谢谢
I hate cold
Today is a hot day.The highest temperature is more than 37 degrees centigrade.I was wearing T-shirt and miniskirt.But I still felt so hot.
In the afternoon,the light and the air conditioner suddenly off.
“Oh,my god, an electric power cut!”My cousin shouted.I went out the home and wanted to know what’s happened.At that time,our neighbors all came out.“The electricians are working”they chanted.
When I came back home,My cousin was looking for my fans.Because we have had the air conditioner.We have not used the fans for a long time.Today,We can never find them.
I opened the fridge.But the ice cream all melted.We were more and more anxious.But the temperature was higher and higher.At that time,my grandmother came out and told us‘‘If you can be quiet,the temperature can be lower.”
Now,we are sitting on the chairs and waiting for the electricity.

more than 37 degrees ->higher than 37 degrees (形容温度用high不用more"多")

suddenly off->were suddenly off(be off才是"断了,停了")

can ->could(整体是过去时,注意时态)

all melted->were all melted

I hate hot weather.
Today is a hot day.The highest temperature is more than 37 degrees centigrade.I was wearing a T-shirt and a miniskirt.But I still felt so hot.
In the afternoon,the light and the air conditioner suddenly went off.
“Oh,my god, an electric power cut!”My cousin shouted.I went out of the house and wanted to know what happened.At that time,our neighbors all came out.“The electricians are fixing it!”they chanted.
When I came back home,My cousin was looking for my fans.Ever since we have had the air conditioner,we have not used fans for a long time.Today,We can never find them.
I opened the fridge to find the ice creams all melted.We were more and more anxious.And the temperature was getting higher and higher.At that time,my grandmother came out and told us‘‘If you can be quiet,the temperature can be lower.”
Now,we are sitting quietly on the chairs and waiting for the electricity.