摄影要学多长时间:翻译:中译英

以上翻译中式英语太多，我试译如下，请参考。
温馨提示:
Attentive tips:
各位游客,为了您的物品存放安全,请将衣物存放在更衣框内(非寄存物品丢失本馆概不负责!),每次收费伍角(押金伍元).
The tourists are required to deposit their clothings into the change-room closet for the sake of safety.The charge each time is 50 fen plus a deposit 5 yuan.(The proprietor will not be responsible for any loss of the non-consignment)
贵重物品请存放在售票处.
Valuables should be deposited in the booking office.
谢谢合作,欢迎光临!
Thanks for your co-operation! welcome!
新感觉游泳馆
Fresh Feeling Swimming Pool
2006年4月28日
April 28th, 2006

温馨提示2:
Attentive tip 2
租,还钥匙请排队,一个一个来,谢谢您的理解和支持!
Please queue up when you want to rent or return the key. Your understanding and support are appreciated again!

Warm prompt: Fellow tourists, for yours goods depositing safety, please deposit the clothing in change clothes in the frame (must to check goods to lose this hall generally not to be responsible!) Each time collects fees 5 jiao (deposit five Yuan). the valuables please to deposit in the ticket office Thanks the cooperation, the welcome presence! New feeling natatorium on April 28, 2006

Warmly prompts 2: Rents, but also the key please line up, comes, thank you the understanding and the support one by one!

It is warm and fragrant to hint:
Each visitor, deposit the safety for the sake of your product, please deposit in the clothes to change dress the frame inside( deposit not the product throw to lose this building all irresponsible!), charges each time five Cape.( security deposit five dollars)
The valuables pleases deposit in the box office.
Thank for corporation, welcome!
The new felling swims the building
In 2006 on April 28

It is warm and fragrant to hint 2:
Rent, return the key please line up, a per to, appreciate your comprehension with support!

The sweet hint:
Each visitor, deposit the safety for the sake of your product, please deposit in clothes to change dress the frame inside( deposit the product to throw to lose this building not all irresponsible!), Charge five Capes( the security deposit five dollars) each time.
The valuables please deposit in the box office.
Thank for corporation, welcome!
The new felling swims the building
April 28 in 2006

The sweet hint 2:
Rent, return the key please line up, a per come, appreciate your the comprehension and the support!

Warm Reminder 1:
Dear fellow visitors, to be on the safe side, you are requested to keep your clothes and accessories in the closet. Otherwise, we will not be held responsible for anything missing or stolen. The fee is fifty cents per person plus a deposit of five dollars, with the latter sum refunded as soon as the key is returned. In addition, valuables like jewelry should be kept at the ticket office. Thank you for your cooperation. Your presence is heartily welcome.
Novel Sensation Swimming Pool April 28, 2006
Warm Reminder 2:
Every time you want to rent or return the key to the closet, please stand in the line and wait for your turn. It is our sincere hope that you will appreciate and support the measure.

Soft tips : Members visitors to your stored items safe, I change clothes displayed in the clothing store (non-deposit notice shall not be responsible for lost items. ), a charge cents (deposit Mrs. million). Valuables stored in the outlets. Thank you, welcome! New feeling pool April 28, 2006 Warm reminder 2 : Tenants also key requests queuing, a 1, Thank you for your understanding and support!