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Changes in Nanjing
With time passed by, great changes have taken place in Nanjing. As a native here, do you know?
Do you know that the New Olympic Sports Center has been built up? It has been the main conncil house of the 10th National sports meeting and has become one of the most important gymnasiums in China; it is the proud of us Nanjing people.
Do you know subway has appeared in Nanjing? It’s fast, safe and cheep, it’s so convenient! More and more subways are been designed and built, and a perfect traffic net will form soon.
Do you know Xuanwu Underground tunnel has been open to traffic? Its technology has reach the world’s standard and it plays an very important role in improving the whole city’s traffic ability and the environment around the lake, also, it increases the economy and makes the tour environment better.
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Well, Nanjing, a magical city is experiencing its fastest ever development now, when you sit in a small garden around the corner, when you see the lighten places of interest at night, when you watch the Worldcup in front of a digital TV, how can you deny Nanjing is not Changing!
Nanjing, the wonderful east city is facing the whole world, confident and active.
Nanjing, my lovely hometown, I pray you better and better sincerely.
You tried very hard to write, but strictly speaking it does not amount to a pass score.
In most sentences, you could actually use present tense instead of present perfect.
There are also apparent mistakes.
\'it is the proud of us\'- \'proud\' is an adjective,not noun.
\'traffic ability\' - \'ability\' is redundant.
\'tour environment\' - \'tour\' is redundant.
You made a lot of common mistakes that other Mainland students always made.
Try to make the tense consistent, cut down the wordy phrases, and differentiate accurately the noun, verb and adjective. You can then write better.
大概这个意思
改变在南京同时间过时的在，大的改变需要在南京里的地方。
像一个人这里，你知道?
你知道,新的奥林匹克的运动中心向上被建造吗?
它是第10的主要的conncil房子国家的运动的会并变为了在中国的最重要的体育馆的一；
它是自尊的我们南京人。
你知道地下道在南京里出现了吗?
它是快地，安全的和吱吱的叫、它是如此方便的s！
越来越地下道被设计并被建造，一个完美的交通网将不久形成。
你在地下知道玄武隧道已经通车?
它的工业技术到达世界的标准和它玩一个在改进整个的城市方面的很重要的角色。在湖泊周围的交通能力和环境，也，它把巡视增加经济并做更好地的环境。
好吧，南京，个魔术的城市体验它的快地曾发展现在，当你在拐角处在一个小的花园坐，当夜晚你看兴趣的照亮地方时，当你看在你怎样能否认南京不是变化的台数字的电视机的前面的Worldcup时时！
南京奇妙的东城市正在面向确信的和活动的全世界。
南京，我的好看的故乡，我越来越更好地真实地恳求你。