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Like May Day,we enjoy a seven-day holiday,too.We can travel to many places of interest.And I usually finish my homework two days before the holiday ends.So I can play on the computer.On October 6th and 7tn.In the morning of October 1st,I always think of the long story of our motherland when I see our national flag going up on the TV.So I like National Day very much.
Like May Day(什么意思？可能你想说的是“和五一长假一样？但是表达有问题）,we enjoy a seven-day holiday,too.We can travel to many places of interest.And I usually finish my homework two days before the holiday ends.So I can play on the computer.On October 6th and 7tn（前面两句都是独立的句子，一个以and开头，一个以so开始。不符合书面语的规范）.In（某个具体的早上用on）the morning of October 1st,I always think of the long story of our motherland（这句话意思含糊。你想表达的是“总是想到我们祖国悠久的历史吗”？） when I see our national flag going up（go up欠妥） on the TV(不要the，因为不是指具体的某一台电视机）.So I like National Day very much.（so用的也不好。直接一句简单的表白更好）。
Like May 1sth holiday， National Holiday also has seven day. We can travel to many places of interest and do many other things that we like(加上这句是因为除了旅游人们还有很多其他的事情可做，比如你后面提到的早点做完作业然后上网）. I usually finish my homework two days before the holiday ends so that I can play on the computer on 6th and 7th of October. On the early morning of October 1st, I always think of the long history of our motherland when I see our national flag rise up on TV. I love National Day.