杭州交通信息网八分休止符节奏型:大家帮忙修改一下
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She is a girl,a beautiful girl.
I was a little happy when I know my partner was her. Though I knew very little about her, she made me feel comfortable. We sat together every listenling course.
渐渐地，I found she is a girl who has mature ideas(成熟的思想). She is very tolerant especially when she gets along with girls. I think she is very generous. Because she often shares some delicious foods with me. I remember one day she brought a duck from her home and give it to me. I was really deeply moved!! And if someone invite her to dinner, she also brought me .
I’m deeply attracted by her self-confidence. She believes she can get things she wants. “Never confess defeat!” (用不言败) is her motto. So from this point, I think she is also a tough girl.
We have many familiar interests, such as shopping, music etc. One day we went shopping together. From 11:30am to 8:00pm!!! Oh, my god!! My body was really tired but I feel very happy in my heart. Because we talk and laugh on our way(一路都在谈笑). I fell like I were talking with my junior friend(初中朋友). And on that day she presented a ring to me. I like it very much. I will keep it well.
She likes rhythmic music, and wants to learn dancing. So we agree to(约好) learn dancing together next term. We still have a common ground is that both of us speak loudly.
I think she is a good girl. I really like her. We became good friend this term. She calls me:”laopo!” and I call her :”laogong!” haha!!
这是我们老师叫我们写的一篇关于partner的文章!请大家帮我修改一下~谢谢,那些有中文的地方就是我觉得不太对的地方.错误可能有点多,见笑了~~~
可不可以全文修改一下啊!?比如时态、固定搭配什么的!让它变得更地道!谢谢啦~~~
I was a little happy when I know my partner was her. Though I knew very little about her, she made me feel comfortable. We sat together every listenling course.
渐渐地，I found she is a girl who has mature ideas(成熟的思想). She is very tolerant especially when she gets along with girls. I think she is very generous. Because she often shares some delicious foods with me. I remember one day she brought a duck from her home and give it to me. I was really deeply moved!! And if someone invite her to dinner, she also brought me .
I’m deeply attracted by her self-confidence. She believes she can get things she wants. “Never confess defeat!” (用不言败) is her motto. So from this point, I think she is also a tough girl.
We have many familiar interests, such as shopping, music etc. One day we went shopping together. From 11:30am to 8:00pm!!! Oh, my god!! My body was really tired but I feel very happy in my heart. Because we talk and laugh on our way(一路都在谈笑). I fell like I were talking with my junior friend(初中朋友). And on that day she presented a ring to me. I like it very much. I will keep it well.
She likes rhythmic music, and wants to learn dancing. So we agree to(约好) learn dancing together next term. We still have a common ground is that both of us speak loudly.
I think she is a good girl. I really like her. We became good friend this term. She calls me:”laopo!” and I call her :”laogong!” haha!!
这是我们老师叫我们写的一篇关于partner的文章!请大家帮我修改一下~谢谢,那些有中文的地方就是我觉得不太对的地方.错误可能有点多,见笑了~~~
可不可以全文修改一下啊!?比如时态、固定搭配什么的!让它变得更地道!谢谢啦~~~
第一句中的know ----knew
在every 前加in
渐渐的--Gradually
应该是with other girls
give --gave it to me
get things 后加what
feel--flet
Because we tlaked and laughed all the way!
I flet like that I was taking with one of my junior friends.
on that day --去掉on
like --liked
We still have a common ground which is that both of us speak loudly.
We became good friend this term.中的friend 加s
嘿嘿！错误确实不少！看来你应该加油啦！最重要的一点就是你的文章中的“中国英语”太多，你应该好好注意克服！