大学创新创业实践:英语作文改错

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Often it less than one month-->
Often it is less than one month.
2 can go to many places-->
and can go to many places(并列句最后一成分前加 and)
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The most important I can ...-->
The most important thing is that I can...
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We were so happy,we took a holiday--->
We were so happy,we would take a holiday
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This winter holiday begins January 18th to February 13th--->
This winter holiday begins at January 18th and will end at February 13th
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They are January 24th,January 28th-->
They are January 24th and January 28th
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Our families got together,had a big dinner-->
Our families got together and had a big dinner
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After the dinner I with my brother -->
After the dinner my brother and I
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After it we Shoot off firecrackers-->
After that we let off firecrackers
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At seven forty-five,we watched the Spring Festival Gala Evening together--->
At seven forty-five,we started to watch the Spring Festival Gala Evening together

I think Winter break is too decifent.Typically,it lasts less than a month.Still,I lke it since I can take a break from school.I can be at liberty and transport myself to lots of places.The incomparable event of all is the Spring festival that I am able to solemnize.The holiday of my country China, inaugurates from January 18th to February 13th.But we started the break on the 24th of January. Chinese New Year is the holiday during that break.During solemnization of the important holiday of my country,I had two days of it that I would never amnesize.January 24th:I went home from my education resource center/school.Tomorrow the Winter break inaugurates. Every student was so happy shouting,''Yay,Winter break inaugurates!''.January 28th:That was the evening of Lunar New Year Eve.Each family got together and feasted big for dinner.After thefeast my brother and I wished every citizen of China a happy new year.As the tradition went on, we received paper money in any value in red paper bags that were given to children as Lunar New Year gifts.Then we shoot off firecrackers.They were so beautiful.They were shot for outraging good fortune at the incoming new year.Last,at seven forty-five,we all watched the Spring festival Gala evening together.

错的比较多，而且用词都很BABY~~

多努力吧~~~~

比如：
The most important I can celebrate the Spring Festival.

改成这样比较好，The most exciting thing is that I can enjoy myself during the SF.

语法错太多，即便改了也不是很好的英语作文。
Winter holiday is too short.
The Chinese New Year holiday is too short.

It is 3 weeks only.
Often it less than one month.

But I like it because I can rest,can be free,can go to many places.
But I like it because of I can relax, be free, and go out.

The most important I can celebrate the Spring Festival.
The most important thing is I can celebrate the Chinese New Year.

This winter holiday begins January 18th to February 13th
The Chinese New Year begins at January 18th ends at February 13th.

Then there is twe days that I can’t forget.They are January 24th,January 28th.
There are two days when I can't forget.They are January 24th and January 28th.

Now,let me tell you the story about each days.
January 24th
I would lik to tell you the stories about two days.

That day I went home,before that day all the Naihai experiment school students learnd at winter camp.
On 24th January,I could go home,before that day all of students of the Naihai experiment school learnd at a winter camp.

When we went out of the school gate,we shouted:“We are away from school,we are going home.”We were so happy,we took a holiday!
When we were going out of the school, we were shouting" we are go away from school, we are going home.

January 28th
That evening was eve of lunar New Year.Our families got together,had a big dinner.
On January 28th was the eve of lunar New Year.

Our families got together,had a big dinner
People got together with their failies and had a dinner.

After the dinner I with my brother wished every people “Happy New Year.”
After the dinner, my brother and I said happy new year to every families.

Then we got money given to children as a lunar New Year gift.
Then we got the lucky money.

After it we Shoot off firecrackers.
After that we played firecrackers.

They are so nice.It is also believed that it will bring good fortune in the coming year.
I'm so happy. And I belive that I will be luckly in the next year.

At seven forty-five,we watched the Spring Festival Gala Evening together.
At a quater to eight, we started to watched the TV progamme of the Chinese New Year.

好多啊

目不忍视了。