武外英中国际学校:怎样用英语写好日记?

英语教材对听说读的交际功能训练要求比较具体明确，容易引起教师的重视。相比之下，对写的能力训练要求则比较简单而且笼统。 初二起始，我根据大部分学生口头表达能力较好而书面表达能力较差的特点，采取了分阶段、分层次训练学生用英语写日记来提高他们书面表达能力。 通过一年的努力，不仅全班的英语写作能力普遍有了很大的进步，而且也促进了英语成绩的全面提高。 班级的英语成绩常保持在年级第一名。

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January 13 2005
It was the first day of our winter holiday. All of us were very happy. Why? Because we have one months to do things we love to do. We are free. Although we have some homework. But we can finish them in several days. And the rest time we can make good use of. My god! We have been very tired after hard studying. In winter holidays, I want to have full sleep and eat good food in order to replenish myself. Last but not the least, I will have a good rest.

January 14 2005
It was the second day of our winter holiday. I felt good. I felt I’m free. I had a lot of time to do things I like. My parents are in Beijing. So I live alone but I don’t feel lonely. But I didn’t do something special. I stayed at home and watched TV. Oh! I wrote an English daily composition. It was my homework. Today, I have slept for 14 hours. I thought I was very tired. It was time for dinner. I must go! I am very hungry.

January 15 2005
It was the third day of our winter holiday. Today, there are many business in my mother’s company. So my mother told me to help my uncle who is the manager of my mother’s company. I sat in my mother’s office and help her answer the telephone. While I was free, I was writing my homework. Although I also have a lot of time to do my homework, I still do it. Because in my mother’s office, I had nothing to do. If I did nothing, I was wasting my time and my life. I can’t do the foolish thing. We should take good use of our time.

January 16 2005
It is a special day today. My mother sent one hundred basket of red bayberries. I like to eat red bayberries. It tastes nice. When they arrived in Shanghai, they were still fresh. But most of them would be sent to my mother’s business friends. I chose the best basket of red bayberries to eat. I put the rest in my refrigerator. Red bayberry is my hometown’s special product. It is well-known in china. Many people like to eat it.

January 17 2005
Today, I still went to my mother’s office. My mother was very busy, so was my father. They always live in Beijing. They must get up early. Because they will manage the factory. So I know they are very laborious. So I should save my money. Also I should help them. Although I can’t do something useful, but I think I should share the work with them. I am one of my family member. In the future, I will take a job and work. It’ time for me to begin to learn how to work.
January 18 2005
I have rested for a week. I began to feel bored. So I went out with my friends. They are my best friends in the middle school. We didn’t go to someplace special. We just saw the other. We had lunch together. While we were having lunch, we were still talking about the new school and new friends. Yes! A year later, we have grown riper. And we learned much more things and got new life. We haven’t enough time to play, to waste and to lose the way. We only have two years. Two years to go, we will get the real life which belongs to us.

January 19 2005
I have stayed in Shanghai alone for a week. It’s time for me to go to my real home—it is in Beijing. My parents are waiting for me. Although outside is no matter how beautiful, Beijing is still my home. In fact, there is many fresh things. Like red bayberries. In the afternoon, I took a bus to Beijing. I was very unlucky that my mp3 was stolen. I was very sad. I didn’t know why thieves went to steal other’s things. Why don’t they hunt for a job? I don’t why! I hope there is no thief in our motherland.

January 20 2005
When I got home, it was very dark. Why? There is no electric. Every year in Beijing, there is lack of electric to supply. Because there are a lot of factories. And it is very cold in winter. So the government decided: supply electric to resident and the factories must stop working. My house is in the manufacturing district. I was unlucky. It was very cold. So my father use the electric making machine to make electric. Oh! What a unlucky winter!

January 21 2005
It was cooler than yesterday. One of my father’s friends invited me to eat red bayberries. You must know it is unusual. Because we will climb the hill to eat red bayberries. There is no chance to eat red bayberries in the hill for the people who don’t live in Beijing. On the hill, you can breathe the fresh air, you can listen birds singing and you can eat red bayberries. It was enjoyable. It is said there are wild pigs in the hill. What a beautiful natural.

January 22 2005
Today I found time was a cruel thing. Whatever man is, time always goes on. It won’t stay to wait for somebody. You can’t use anything to exchange time. Time is also a fair thing. Although you have a lot of money or you enjoy high reputation, time won’t leave them more. Today I found I hadn’t enough time. Although I have 50-day holiday, but I found I had a lot of things to do. I had a lot of homework to do and I had something necessary to do.
January 23 2005
I have rested for 10 days. In these days, I felt very bored. I didn’t know to do what. Although I had a lot of things to do, I felt uncomfortable. I was ill because of the cold weather. I was tired, sleepy and had no strength. My parents are worried about my health. in fact, it didn’t matter. I was always in the room with air-conditioner and opened it in a low temperature. So when I went out, the high temperature disagreed to me. Finally, I was ill.

January 24 2005
Today, when I awaked up, I found the air-conditioner didn’t work. I used the control, but it still didn’t work. I knew the air-conditioner was in trouble. I went downstairs. My father told me two air-conditioner and two computer had been broken. Because my father used electric making machine to make electric, so the voltage was not stable. It led to the trouble. Oh! Whenever the government will let the factory use electric? If it lasts longer, I will be crazy!!

January 25 2005
It doesn’t matter that the air-conditioner has been broken. But my notebook-computer also was broken. I really don’t know what to do. So I went to play basketball. I didn’t know any one in that place. And I was the first time to go there to play basketball. At first, there was no person playing basketball. So I played basketball alone. A few minutes later, some students came to play. So we played together. Of course, we had a match. And It lasts two hours. After the match, I felt I would be dead. I was too tired.

January 25 2005
No computer, I will not know to do what. I have no solution to the problem. So I sent my notebook-computer to the Asus computer company. I must have my computer repaired. And the other one, it was thoroughly broken. It can’t be repaired again.The computer company told me that my notebook computer needed one week to repair. The electric led to all trouble. And many electrical appliances are broken. I don’t know when our country can solve the problem.

January 26 2005
I have lost two computers, but I had another one. I bought it about five years ago. It can be called curio. Though it was old. But it can still work. Although it works slowly, I was pleased. I can go on internet again. Chatting with my friends is a good relaxing. In the internet, one of my old friends invited me to tomorrow’s party. He told me that some friends would go, too. So I promised to go. A-ha! I can see my old friends. I was very happy and hopeful.

January 27 2005
It was sunny today. I was excited. I got up at a quarter to seven. I made a appointment to meet at nine o’clock. After I had my breakfast, I went to the city center of Beijing. It was cold outside. When I arrived, my friends didn’t arrive. I waited for him in front of the KFC’s door. I haven’t seen them for a year. And in a year, we didn’t come into contact with others frequently. About ten minutes left, my friends arrived one by one. After we greeted, we went to the 5-star restaurant to have lunch. The lunch cost us 800 yuan. Oh, dear! They were all very rich, and one was poor.

January 28 2005
Yesterday we played happily, but there were only ten people. I remembered last year there were twenty-two people at all. I heard some my friends had gone abroad. They went abroad to study. Maybe I couldn’t see them in the future. I think next year we won’t make a party. Next year is a very important year. We all will prepare for the college entrance examination. It is the most important for us now.
January 29 2005
I was bored. So I wanted to travel to Hong Kang. I told my father my decision. To my surprise, my father agreed. My father thought I always at home was bad. He thought I should go out to see our country clearly. How beautiful our country is! My father drove me a travel service. I filled out an application form. After that, the agency would finish every things. At last the agency told me it would take a week time to transact procedures.

January 30 2005
The screen of my father’s mobile telephone is broken. When you open the mobile telephone, the screen is always white with light. You can’t see from the screen. And my father is a businessman. He needed a new one. So my father and I went to the electrical appliance shop. There are many new kinds of mobile telephones. At first, my father chose a Sumsung one. But all the telephones have sold out. Finally, my father chose a Motorola one.

January 31 2005
The food in Shanghai disagree me. I think the food in Beijing is the most delicious. Seafood in Beijing is very fresh. Prawns in restaurant are all alive. And there are many food that you can’t see in other cities. It is very cheap that you eat seafood in Beijing. The less money you pay, the more enjoyable you are. Maybe my stomach is ill. Whatever food I eat, I am still thin. And I am too thin, I want to be a litter fatter. So I must eat more.

February 1 2005
My dog will be dead. She is very old. We have kept her for ten years. Now her hairs are falling. And she always lies on the ground. She can’t see very clearly. She eats a little. She becomes thin. She was very strong before. She is still guarding my family. She is one of my family member. Now we are all uneasy because she will die. I think you may know my thinking. Even if it is a dog, you can’t forget it. So these days, we feet her the best food.

学生英语书面表达能力的提高，绝非一朝一夕能够达到的。 现将我的做法总结如下：

一、因人施教，规范要求

初二大部分学生没有养成写日记的习惯。 用英语写日记，对他们来说，更是个新鲜事。 万事开头难。 首先，学生有畏难情绪，担心增加学习负担。 针对学生学习基础知识和接受能力的个别差异，我不是要求全体学生一轰而上，而是在各班里挑选6-8名对英语感兴趣而学习成绩又好的学生作为日记写作的示范生，通过对这些学生的超前辅导，强化训练，以点带面逐步扩展，有目的、有计划地推动全班日记写作的广泛开展。教师把自己的目的和意图告诉学生，使他们明确目的，初步掌握用英语写日记的基本方法，鼓励他们树立信心，坚持写作，每天都得写，不管是多还是少，并拿出日记范文，让他们阅读，总结英语日记的格式、正文内容及注意点。

二、及时讲评，互相交流

定时收日记，认真批改。 每本日记都要写上评语(优点、不足之处、注意点)，教师的评语要以鼓励性的语言为主，以表扬学生的写作精神。

教师应及时掌握学生的心理动态，保持学生注意，激发学生的创作热情。 刚写日记时，学生热情高涨，话题也多，但写了一段时间后就会觉得越来越没东西可写。 因此每周都要召开一次日记写作交流会，学生都把自己的日记本带来，互相传阅，比较分析，然后谈体会，达到开拓视野、取长补短的目的。 通过交流会，及时点评，解答疑难，使学生重新树立信心，创写更好的佳作。

三、提高写作水平的三个阶段

针对初中学生英语刚起步的特点，用英语写日记不可能一步到位，而是要遵循由浅入深、由易到难、循序渐进的规律。 我把日记写作分为三个阶段。

(一)初级阶段——多做模仿性写作。

这一阶段主要训练学生以课本文章为主要内容的日记写作，即把课本文章当成练习写作的参照物，让学生有文可依，这样会减少学生的畏难情绪，增加他们成功的信心。 学生通过课本的学习，可以同步对课文进行仿写、改写、缩写、扩写等等，使学生强化记忆课文中的词语和句型，达到提高书面表达能力的目的。

例如，Lesson 11 Book Ⅱ是一篇介绍中秋佳节的短文，一位学生仿写如下：

习作(一)

Monday, Sep.29 Fine

Mid-Autumn Day usually comes in September or October. On this day everyone eats mooncakes. The mooncakes look like the moon. So we all call them mooncakes. They're delicious.

At night, the Chinese families often stay in the open air and eat mooncakes. How happy they are!

Lesson 23 Book II 是一篇对话形式的短文，另一位学生则改写如下：

习作(二)

Friday, Oct. 17 Fine

This is a park. There are many trees and flowers in it. There are some boats inthe river. The boats look like ducks. Some people go boating. They're having a good time.

这两篇习作简单明了，描述完整，学生易于接受，达到了初步练习写的目的。

(二)中级阶段——转入独立性写作

在经过了第一阶段的模仿性写作后，学生对日记写作有了一定的理性认识与实践体会，这时我就向学生提出要扩充词数、增加内容和写作素材，让学生的习作更贴近生活实际，写他们身边最感兴趣的人和事物，提高他们写作的独立性。

一位学生根据自己上学路上所遇到的事情，写了下面这篇日记：

习作(三)

Wednesday, Nov.26 Sunny

This morning on my way to school I met a very old woman at the bus stop. I looked at her for many minutes. She looked sad. When the bus came, we all ran to the bus. But the poor woman was too old to run. So I ran back and helped her get on the bus. She laughed and said, “Thank you, little girl. You're very kind!”

“It's my pleasure, Granny. I'm very glad to help you!”

这篇习作情节生动，语言自然，条理清楚，助人为乐的思想品德活现于写作之中。

(三)提高阶段——增强创造性写作

这一阶段要求学生把所学的英语知识与生活实际结合起来，并有效地融汇于英语写作当中。

这个阶段要放宽学生写作时间，由原来的一天一篇改为二、三天一篇，但要求上交的日记质量高、词数够、内容丰富、主题鲜明、情节生动、语法正确。

在阳光灿烂的5月，我组织了全班学生参加一次郊游活动。 一位学生以他的亲身感受写了这篇愉快的郊游日记。

习作(四)

Friday, May 8 Sunny

Today I went outing with my classmates and teachers. It was a fine day. In the morning I got up very early and got everything ready for the outing. We went to Jishan by bus.

It was very early when we reached Jishan. So we began to climb Mountain Beilin.The mountain was quite high. I felt tired when I climbed to the top of the mountain.

At noon we found a place near the river for a picnic. We made a fire to cook lunch, then we started to roast the pork. We all ate a lot and felt very full. In the end we took a photo near the river.

Look at this photo! How happy we are!

四、总结提高，全班推广

经过一学期的训练，日记小组的成员已养成了每天写英文日记的习惯。 他们从不会写、怕写到会写、爱写，并且能够写好了。 他们的明显进步激发了班上许多其他学生写作日记的愿望。 学生们一个个跃跃欲试，全班参与日记写作的时机已经成熟。 教师此时因势利导，在班上提出人人参加日记写作小组的要求，并决定由原来的日记写作小组成员担任组长，日记先由组长批改后再交给教师审批。 在初二下学期，全班举行日记写作比赛，评出优秀日记张贴表扬，极大地鼓舞了全班学生学习英语的积极性和主动性。

日记写作不仅提高了学生的书面表达能力，而且培养了学生学习英语、运用英语的兴趣，促进了听、说、读、写能力的全面发展。

如何写好英语日记
日记就是人生的脚印，一天天，一年年的足迹，回头远望时，就是一个人的人生轨迹。即使脚印杂乱无章，即使脚印串成一路坎坷，但当一个人用日记去回顾几十年前的沧桑时，回忆起那日记带给你的感动。人生路上，有些感动有如大漠遗迹一样易于风化。那么请用日记来保护这些感动，因为感动常在，才会饮水思源。同样，人生路上的苦涩，可以让你忆往昔，珍惜现在的美好的时光，而不是去挥霍生命。失败与成功，日记会一路与你同行，不离不弃地做你的好听众。
英语只是一种语言，它是一种符号，是人类在千百年来寄载了众多的标识与交流的载体。英语是活的，如果缺乏英语环境，就得自己去创造一个能够用英语思想，用英文记录，用英文表达生活经历的学习环境，写英语日记就是一种简便易行的方法。
如果应付考试，你的确需要背诵大量的单词和复杂语法，但大家都有体会，考后一个月如果不去碰的话，基本上这些信息都烟消云散了。要把英语同化成自己内心语言音素的一部分，就是要学会以英语的思维来组织自己的思想，学会以英语来欣赏身边的美景，记录周围的环境，抒发内心的感受，这样才能活学活用、融汇贯通。用英语来动态地把握生活细节，能帮助你提高英文写作能力，为你创造一个英文叙事与言情的新境界。如果说道路桥梁都是百年工程的话，那么用这种方式来提高英语至少也是长年累月工程。你不能期待连续写几个星期，几个月，使自己的各种英语能力突飞猛进。
也许你认为，写英文日记都是一些生活琐事，单调而又枯燥乏味，对学习英文没有多大用处。或者说自己的所用的单词和语法，都是山寨土匪式的用法，不登考试大雅之堂。你那真错了，语言的最高境界是应用，是在于心之感受。而不是以考试为最终目标。当然，只要你三、四年一直持之以恒写英语日记，相信你的考试能力会潜移默化中得到增长的。如果能够持之以恒，必将锻炼英语思维能力，增强英语语感，提高英语综合运用能力的有效途径。
如果写好英语日记，那么第一步就是：1）低起点，无要求。你可能会说，我写的东西，是GP不通的，但是 "重要的是，你要敢于写。你一开始，可以写非常简单的：I go to market, and I buy pen. 即使这句话是错误的，但至少你已经用原始的方法记录了。这比山顶洞人用象形文字来记录要好得多。 2）持之以恒。要相信一个好习惯可以有一个好的回报，即使这种回报是潜移默化的。从一开始就想写长句，当然会倍觉吃力。写最简单的句子，它会慢慢沉淀下来，潜移默化之中，你会喊叹英语实力进步之神速。
在这里，我不提及，你要写好的英文日记，要使你的英文表达专业，自然，地道。英语日记，管什么格式，你不高兴写天气，可以忽略，你不高兴写星期几，也可以忽略。你并不必写一天重点的事情，就记流水帐得了。想到第一件事，有冲动想写的。就是 (1) ..... (2)...... 条条框框太多，易打击自己写英语日记的积极性。坚持第一，质量第二，宁可一天内只记录一句话，也不可缺了这一天。
写英语日记不是英语写作学习和训练。许多学生先是用汉语写日记，再将其翻译成英文，所以会觉得写英语日记有点难。英语和汉语不仅语序不同，而且表达情感的方式也迥异。因此汉语里有的话，未必在英语里有对应的话。更何况在我国这样的应试教育环境下，写英语日记更是难上加难。
1.My opinion on Internet
Hello,everyone!As you know,many students like to work on the Internet.Of course,it can bring us many good things.We can learn more knowledge outside our books,practice our spoken English with someone else and look up some useful information.
At the same time,it can bring us some bad things as well.Some students have made too many friends,seen some bad information that is not good for us and spent too much time on it.We should know what to do and what not to do.
That’s my idea.Thank you for listening!
2.How to make friends
It’s hard to make friends if you stay alone all the time.It’s easier to make friends when you have similar interests.
Don’t be afraid to show people what you are really good at.Talk about the things you like and do best.
Look at people in the eyes when you talk to them.
Be a good listener.Let people talk about themselves before talking about yourself.
Be friendly to a lot of people.Try to help your friends when they are in trouble because a friend in need is a friend indeed.That way you’ll have a bigger group to choose from and have more chances to make friends.
3.My view on television
Television has come into our life for many years.
We can’t live happily without television.It can give us the latest information and news.It can open up our eyes and enlarge our knowledge.We can get happiness from the plays on television.We’ll be boring all day if there is no television.Television programs are attractive.After a whole day’s hard work we can sit before the television and drink a cup of tea.How wonderful it is!
Television is also bad for people’s health.It’s bad for you to watch TV too long,especially bad for your eyes.
It is true that watching TV can influence our behavior.However,it depends on what we do
4.Generation gap between parents and children
Nowadays ,there are more and more misunderstanding between parents and children which is so- called generation gap .It is estimated that (75 percentages of parents often complain their children’s unreasonable behavior while children usually think their parents too old fashioned).
Why have there been so much misunderstanding between parents and children?Maybe the reasons can be listed as follows .The first one is that ( the two generations,having grown up at different times,have different likes and dislikes ,thus the disagreement often rises between them) .Besides(due to having little in common to talk about ,they are not willing to sit face to face ) .The third reason is (with the pace of modern life becoming faster and faster ,both of them are so busy with their work or study that they don’t spare enough time to exchange ideas ).To sum up ,the main cause of XX is due to ( lake of communication and understanding each other) .
It is high time that something were done upon it.For one thing (children should respect their parents ).On the other hand ,( parents also should show solicitue for their children).All these measures will certainly bridge the generation gap .
5.My Little "Pen Pal"
I met a girl called Sue on the Intemet.We are of the same age.And we talked happily with each other.So we decided to write to each other daily,of course through e-mail.We can write down what we feel and what we think and then forward to each other.We also try to write in English.She once lived in the United States with her parents,so she can speak native English.In this way,we are getting closer and closer.And furthermore both of our English has improved quickly and greatly.How nice it is to have a "pen pal"